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Solar system


  Our solar system is a great one where is sited Earth planet. There are a lot of stars, and the main is the sun. We are located on the Milkway on the 4th ring named Orion. There are nine planets in our solar system.
They are: Mercurio, Venus, Earth, Mars, Jupiter, Saturn, Neptune, and Pluto. It's amazing how big our solar system is. The Milky Way galaxy has bilions and bilions of stars. The nearest solar system found is named Alpha Centauri, far from us by 16 light years. (I do not know exactly, consider this number as fiction)
Mercurio is the closest planet to the sun; it has no atmosphere, and it takes 88 days to complete its orbit around the sun. Venus is the most high-temperature planet in relation to the others; it is about 846 °C. It takes 225 days to complete its orbit around the sun. The Earth is our house, and it shelters more than 8 billion types of life.
It is amazing how the planet has suffered a lot of changes in its geological history. I know we are facing a lot of ecological issues. Such as green house effects and the increase of CO2 in the atmosphere, which increases the effects of green house gases.
I'll take several pages to write about the Earth because I love it. Jupiter is a great planet made of gases. It is twenty times bigger than the Earth. It has no atmosphere, and recently it was studied by NASA. For while it is... come soon I'll write more about this issue. My prior interest is writing correctly,
and to pay attention to grammatical rules.

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Daniel
Solar system

  Our solar system is a great one where
is sited Earth planet planet earth is located . There are a lot of stars, and the main one is the sun. We are located on in the Milkway on Milky way in the 4th ring named Orion. There are nine planets in our solar system.
They are:
Mercurio Mercury , Venus, Earth, Mars, Jupiter, Saturn, Neptune, and Pluto. It's amazing how big our solar system is. The Milky Way galaxy has bilions billions and bilions billions of stars. The nearest solar system found is named Alpha Centauri, far from us by 16 light years lightyears away . (I do not know exactly, consider this number as fiction)
Mercurio Mercury is the closest planet to the sun ; it . It has no atmosphere, and it takes 88 days to complete its orbit around the sun. Venus is the most high-temperature planet in relation to the others; it is about 846 °C. It takes 225 days to complete its orbit around the sun. The Earth is our house home , and it shelters more than 8 billion types of life.
It is amazing how the planet has suffered a lot of changes in its geological history. I know we are facing a lot of ecological issues. Such as green house effects and the increase of CO2 in the atmosphere, which increases the effects of green house gases.
I'll take several pages to write about the Earth because I love it. Jupiter is a great planet made of gases. It is twenty times bigger than the Earth. It has no atmosphere, and recently it was studied by NASA. For while it is... come soon I'll write more about this issue. My prior interest is writing correctly,
and to pay attention to grammatical rules.
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Great job overall. I has provided spelling and grammar corrections, but there are also a few other things you can do to sound more native: 'There are a lot of stars, and the main one is the sun' Is completely correct, but as a native I would have said: 'There are lots of stars, the main one being the sun' - this is a very subtle difference though so I probably wouldn't worry about it. Hope it's useful!
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