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Adventure on roof house
I like of collect very adventure of the my life, but a more fantastic adventure was when I saw stars on roof of the my place. It was great , amazing and very well.
I make this when I'm anxious with school, extracurriculares and other things. The star, galaxies and universe calm me.
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You are an astrophile like me! :)
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Yes, I am. I LOVE the universe.
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Adventure on
the
roof
of my
house
I like
of
collect
very
adventure
of the
to
have
adventures
in
my life, but a
more
really
fantastic adventure was when I
saw
went
to look at the
stars
on
from
the
roof of
the
my place. It was great
, amazing
,
and
very
well
really
good
.
Imake
do
this when I'm anxious
with
about
school,
extracurriculares
extracurricular
activities,
and other things. The
star
stars
,
the
galaxies and
the
universe calm me.
I
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thanks
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Adventure on roof house
I like
of
to
collect
very
every
adventure of
the
my life
,
but
a
.
A
more fantastic adventure was when I saw stars on
the
roof of
the
my place. It was great , amazing and very
well
awesome
.
Imake
do
this when I'm anxious with school,
extracurriculares
extracurriculars
and other things. The
star
stars
, galaxies and
the
universe
calm
makes
me
calm
.
I
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Adventure on
the
roof
of my
house
I like
of
collect
very adventure of the
adventures
in
my life, but
a
more
one
fantastic adventure was when I saw stars on roof of the my place. It was great , amazing and very
well
good
.
Imake
do
this when I'm anxious with school,
extracurriculares
extra-curricular
activities
and other things. The star, galaxies and universe calm me.
I
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A couple of specifics on the changes:
well --> good: well is an adverb, and describes, *how* you do something (I ride a bike well, I swim well) but good is an adjective that describes a quality of something (a friend is good, an experience was good, a good dog). Like everything in English this usually applies, but there are exceptions. But that's why the change here.
make --> do: In English you *do* things rather than *make* them. Making in English is quite specifically crafting something or creating it - you make a cake.
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Hi freney, you might want to select the little page icon next to the title of your correction; that will show the corrected version. There is an error.
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