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Winter
I can feel that you are approaching and it is inevitable. The days are getting shorter and the chilly winds can touch my bones.
Oh winter why you don't stay where you are and don't come to visit. You just bring me the blues, even when you can bring the most beautiful sightings I don't get happy when you come. Even when you bring the best holidays you also leave a hole in my heart.
Oh winter please don't come home!.
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Corrections
Winter
I can feel that you are approaching and it is inevitable. The days are getting shorter and the chilly winds can touch my bones.
Oh winter why you don't stay where you areand don
?
Don
't come to visit. You
just
only
bring me the blues
,
even
.
Even
when you can bring the most beautiful
sightings
sights,
I don't
get
become
happy when you come. Even when you bring the best holidays
,
you
also
leave a hole in my heart.
Oh winter please don't come home!.
Oh winter why you don't stay where you are
Oh winter please don't come home!.
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Comment(s)
Corrected as best as I could for grammar's sake. But seriously, I like it the way it is, without correction. Poetry should be free of constraint. It's just beautiful that way.
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Winter
I can feel that you are approaching and
it
is
you
are
inevitable. The days are getting shorter and the chilly winds can
already
touch my bones.
Oh winter whyyou
don't
you
stay where you are and
don't
never
come
here
to visit
me
. You just
bring
give
me the blues
,
even when you
can
bring the most beautiful
sightings
I
don't
get
happy
when you come
sights,
you
leave
me
with
sadness
. Even when you bring the best holidays
,
you
also
leave a hole in my heart.
Oh winter , please don't come home!.
!
Oh winter why
Oh winter , please don't come home
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Comment(s)
I agree with Philip that your piece is great and that poetry should be free flowing and all. Just would like to add some more spice and drama in there with the rhyming.
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