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At 5 pm
I look to the right and find this picture of myself on the wall. It smiles back to me.
I was in my twenties, a time when I traveled to beaches a lot. This one is Cabo Frio, in Rio de Janeiro state. My friend Julia is a terrific photographer and captured my best profile. My best mood, as well. I had this huge curly mane which I was very proud of, and I used to wear a lot of beaded necklaces. Bikini all day long.
In the faint background you can see ghosted people facing the horizon, the sea water leveled to their knees or waist. What a strange, yet perfect activity! It's all blueish. 5 pm. It reminds me of the temperature, warm but pleasant, and of the light, open but not aggressive to the eyes. 5 pm.
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This was very atmospheric. Your writing is great!
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At 5 pm
I look to the right and find this picture of myself on the wall. It smiles back
to
at
me.
I was in my twenties, a time when I traveled to beaches a lot. This one is Cabo Frio, in Rio de Janeiro state. My friend Julia is a terrific photographer and captured my best profile. My best mood, as well. I had this huge curly mane which I was very proud of, and I used to wear a lot of beaded necklaces. Bikini all day long.
In
Faintly
in
the
faint
background you can see
ghosted
ghostly
people facing the horizon, the sea
water
leveled
up
to their knees or waist. What a strange, yet perfect activity! It's all blueish. 5 pm. It reminds me of the temperature, warm but pleasant, and of the light,
open
bright
but not
aggressive
to
hard
on
the eyes. 5 pm.
I was in my twenties, a time when I traveled to beaches a lot. This one is Cabo Frio, in Rio de Janeiro state. My friend Julia is a terrific photographer and captured my best profile. My best mood, as well. I had this huge curly mane which I was very proud of, and I used to wear a lot of beaded necklaces. Bikini all day long.
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