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Conflicts in Myanmar

This year, after the democratic election of the civilian leader Aung San Suu Kyi, a military coup has taken place in the country, likewse peaceful protests calling for a restoration of democracy.

Over the last weekend, it has been alleged that the deadliest day since the takeover was on Saturday, when the miilitaries were showcasing Myanmar's prowess whereas their colleagues were unleashing batons and bullets on protesters, workers, labour leaders and even children. Basically, citizens hit the street to protest against the coup and ask for Suu Kyi's releasing. Without even considering the legitimacy of the movement, policies and militaries have been killing the individuals they were supposedly to protect.

The international community has led the condemnation of the violence perpetrated by the junta. On this note, the United State has suspended their trade engagement with the country. Furthermore, Myanmar allies, like China, don't approve such bloody clashes. As far as United Nations measures, they have condemned the brutality but they have not considered possible sanctions to the militaries, which would require either China's support or abstention in the security council.

In shorting, the attempts to restore democracy in Myanmar have failed to sway militaries so far. Plus, the national media has been supporting the current regime by mitigating the seriousness of the bloodshed. For instance, in the last conflict, at least 100 people were killed by the military forces. However, they pledged the death roll was 49 people and that the protesters had used bombs and guns against security forces, which would consist of a threat to "state tranquility and security". Certainly. the media will be constantly used in order to keep people from reliable information and democracy will remain as an utopia for now.

Hopefully, they will be having better days in the near future, and international community will take more effective action in order to help this country.

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Conflicts in Myanmar
This year, after the democratic election of the civilian leader Aung San Suu Kyi, a military coup has taken place in the country, likewse leading to peaceful protests calling for a the restoration of democracy.

Over the last weekend, it has been alleged that the deadliest day since the takeover was on Saturday, when the
miilitaries military were showcasing Myanmar's prowess whereas whilst their colleagues were unleashing batons and bullets on protesters, workers, labour leaders and even children. Basically, citizens hit the street streets to protest against the coup and ask for Suu Kyi's releasing release . Without even considering the legitimacy of the movement, policies the police and militaries military have been killing the (very) individuals they were are supposedly there to protect.

The international community has led the condemnation of the violence perpetrated by the junta. On this note, the United
State States has suspended their trade engagement engagements with the country. Furthermore, Myanmar 's allies, like China, don't approve of such bloody clashes. As far as the United Nations measures go , they have condemned the brutality , but they have not considered possible sanctions to on the militaries military , which as this would require either China's support or abstention in the security council.

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shorting short , the attempts to restore democracy in Myanmar have thus far failed to sway militaries so far the military . Plus, the national media has been supporting the current regime by mitigating the seriousness of the bloodshed. For instance, in the last conflict, at least 100 people were killed by the military forces. However, they pledged reported the death roll toll was 49 people and that the protesters had used bombs and guns against the security forces, which would consist of constitute a threat to "state tranquility tranquillity and security". Certainly . the media will continue to be constantly used in order to keep people from reliable information and democracy will remain as an utopia utopian for now.

Hopefully,
they there will be having better days in the near future, and that the international community will take more effective action in order to help this country.
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