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Raining outside
Thomas has been barbecued outside the home all morning. He likes it. To barbecue for those he loves. It's refreshing and make him feel useful. The day is sunny and everyone is happy to be together again. They deserve it after all he nights spent in the hospital .
The time in the hospital feels like a dream , a bad one, but still something out of the reality. The machines , and nurses, the cry and , most of all, the pain NEVER get away.
I have to remember everything is in he past, now is another day and I am making barbecue outside he home in a running day....WAIT A MINUTE , RUNNING DAY? Oh my, it's running !!
" I need help here !"
Now we are wet, with the barbecue in the kitchen , but incredibly we are happy.....
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Raining outside
Thomas has been
barbecued
barbecuing
outside
the
his
home all morning. He likes it.
To
He
loves to
barbecue for
those
the
people
he
loves
cares about
. It's refreshing and
make
makes
him feel useful.
The
day
Today
is sunny and everyone is happy to be together again. They deserve it after all
he
the
nights spent in the hospital
.
The time in the hospitalfeels
felt
like a
dream
nightmare
,
a
bad
one,
but
still
something
out
but
still
very
real.
The
imagery
of the
reality. The
machines
,
and
the
nurses, the
cry
crying
and
, most of all, the pain NEVER
get
fade
[or go]
away.
I have to remember : everything is inhe
the
past
,
now
.
Today
is another day and I am making barbecue outside
he
my
home
in
on
a
running
rainy
day....WAIT A MINUTE ,
RUNNING
RAINY
DAY? Oh my, it's
running
raining
!!
" I need help here !"
Now we are wet, with the barbecue in the kitchen , butincredibly
still,
we are
incredibly
happy.....
The time in the hospital
I have to remember : everything is in
" I need help here !"
Now we are wet, with the barbecue in the kitchen , but
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Comment(s)
You changed from 3rd person to 1st person. If you're talking about yourself, you'll say, "I", "me", "myself," but not referring to yourself by name. If Thomas is someone else, then you will continue saying, "he", "him", and "Thomas".
I am sorry you were in the hospital.
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Raining outside
Thomas has been
barbecued
barbecuing
outside
the
his
home all morning. He likes
it.
To
to
barbecue for those he loves. It's refreshing
,
and
make
it
makes
him feel useful. The day is sunny and everyone is happy to be together again. They deserve it after all
he
the
nights spent in the hospital
.
The time in the hospital feels like a dream , a bad one, but still somethingout
outside
of
the
reality. The machines
,
and
the
nurses, the
cry
crying
and
, most of all, the pain
that
NEVER
get
went
away.
I have to remember everything is inhe
the
past
,
now
.
Now
is another day and I am
making
barbecue
barbecuing
outside
he
my
home
in
on
a
running
rainy
day
....
...
WAIT A MINUTE
,
RUNNING
RAINY
DAY? Oh my, it's
running
raining
!!
" I need help here !"
Now we are wet, with the barbecue in the kitchen , but incredibly we are happy.....
The time in the hospital feels like a dream , a bad one, but still something
I have to remember everything is in
" I need help here !"
Now we are wet, with the barbecue in the kitchen , but incredibly we are happy.....
Posted
Raining outside
Thomas has been
barbecued
barbecuing
outside the home all morning. He likes
it.
To
to
barbecue for those he loves. It's refreshing and
make
makes
him feel useful.
The
day
It
is
a
sunny
day
and everyone is happy to be together again. They deserve it after all
he
the
nights spent in the hospital
.
The time in the hospital feels like a dream,
;
a bad one
,
but
.
It
still
something
out
of
the
does
not
feel
like
reality. The machines
, and nurses, the
cry
crying,
and
,
most of all, the pain
would
NEVER
get
go
away.
I have to remember that everything is inhe
the
past
,
now
.
Today
is another day and I am making barbecue outside he home
in
on
a
running
rainy
day....WAIT A MINUTE
,
RUNNING
RAINY
DAY? Oh my, it's
running
raining
!!
" I need help here !"
Now we are wet, with the barbecue in the kitchen , but still incrediblywe are
happy.....
The time in the hospital feels like a dream
I have to remember that everything is in
" I need help here !"
Now we are wet, with the barbecue in the kitchen , but still incredibly
Posted
Raining outside
Thomas has been
barbecued
barbecuing
outside
the
his
home all morning. He likes
it.
To
to
barbecue for those he loves. It's refreshing and
make
makes
him feel useful. The day is sunny and everyone is happy to be together again. They deserve it after all he nights spent in the hospital
. The time in the hospital feels like a dream
, a bad one, but still
like
something
out
outside
of
the
reality. The machines
,
and
the
nurses, the
cry
crying,
and
,
most of all
,
the pain
that
NEVER
get
goes
away. I have to remember
that
everything is in
he
the
past,
now
today
is another day and I am making barbecue outside
he
my
home
in
on
a
running
rainy
day
....
...
WAIT A MINUTE
,
RUNNING
A
RAINY
DAY? Oh my, it's
running
!!
raining!
"
I need help here
!" Now we are wet,
with
having
the barbecue in the kitchen
,
but
incredibly
still,
we are
incredibly
happy
.....
...
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