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Raining outside

Thomas has been barbecued outside the home all morning. He likes it. To barbecue for those he loves. It's refreshing and make him feel useful. The day is sunny and everyone is happy to be together again. They deserve it after all he nights spent in the hospital .
The time in the hospital feels like a dream , a bad one, but still something out of the reality. The machines , and nurses, the cry and , most of all, the pain NEVER get away.
I have to remember everything is in he past, now is another day and I am making barbecue outside he home in a running day....WAIT A MINUTE , RUNNING DAY? Oh my, it's running !!
" I need help here !"
Now we are wet, with the barbecue in the kitchen , but incredibly we are happy.....

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Raining outside
Thomas has been barbecued barbecuing outside the his home all morning. He likes it. To He loves to barbecue for those the people he loves cares about . It's refreshing and make makes him feel useful. The day Today is sunny and everyone is happy to be together again. They deserve it after all he the nights spent in the hospital .
The time in the hospital
feels felt like a dream nightmare , a bad one, but still something out but still very real. The imagery of the reality. The machines , and the nurses, the cry crying and , most of all, the pain NEVER get fade [or go] away.
I have to remember
: everything is in he the past , now . Today is another day and I am making barbecue outside he my home in on a running rainy day....WAIT A MINUTE , RUNNING RAINY DAY? Oh my, it's running raining !!
" I need help here
!"
Now we are wet, with the barbecue in the kitchen , but
incredibly still, we are incredibly happy.....
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You changed from 3rd person to 1st person. If you're talking about yourself, you'll say, "I", "me", "myself," but not referring to yourself by name. If Thomas is someone else, then you will continue saying, "he", "him", and "Thomas". I am sorry you were in the hospital.
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AnneLions
Raining outside
Thomas has been barbecued barbecuing outside the his home all morning. He likes it. To to barbecue for those he loves. It's refreshing , and make it makes him feel useful. The day is sunny and everyone is happy to be together again. They deserve it after all he the nights spent in the hospital .
The time in the hospital feels like a dream
, a bad one, but still something out outside of the reality. The machines , and the nurses, the cry crying and , most of all, the pain that NEVER get went away.
I have to remember everything is in
he the past , now . Now is another day and I am making barbecue barbecuing outside he my home in on a running rainy day .... ... WAIT A MINUTE , RUNNING RAINY DAY? Oh my, it's running raining !!
"
I need help here !"
Now we are wet, with the barbecue in the kitchen
, but incredibly we are happy.....
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deleted.97147
Raining outside
Thomas has been barbecued barbecuing outside the home all morning. He likes it. To to barbecue for those he loves. It's refreshing and make makes him feel useful. The day It is a sunny day and everyone is happy to be together again. They deserve it after all he the nights spent in the hospital .
The time in the hospital feels like a dream
, ; a bad one , but . It still something out of the does not feel like reality. The machines , and nurses, the cry crying, and , most of all, the pain would NEVER get go away.
I have to remember
that everything is in he the past , now . Today is another day and I am making barbecue outside he home in on a running rainy day....WAIT A MINUTE , RUNNING RAINY DAY? Oh my, it's running raining !!
"
I need help here !"
Now we are wet, with the barbecue in the kitchen
, but still incredibly we are happy.....
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Marrciray
Raining outside
Thomas has been barbecued barbecuing outside the his home all morning. He likes it. To to barbecue for those he loves. It's refreshing and make makes him feel useful. The day is sunny and everyone is happy to be together again. They deserve it after all he nights spent in the hospital . The time in the hospital feels like a dream , a bad one, but still like something out outside of the reality. The machines , and the nurses, the cry crying, and , most of all , the pain that NEVER get goes away. I have to remember that everything is in he the past, now today is another day and I am making barbecue outside he my home in on a running rainy day .... ... WAIT A MINUTE , RUNNING A RAINY DAY? Oh my, it's running !!
raining! " I need help here !" Now we are wet, with having the barbecue in the kitchen , but incredibly still, we are incredibly happy ..... ...
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