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The planning to do an exchange


A good beginning for a college student to go into the international market is through an international student exchange. Nowadays there are different kinds of exchange that you can do, exist that are more focusing on developing of your skills languages or you can you to work travel but improve your skills langue in an informal way.
Thus, one thing that is so important for this plan to work is the money. It can look a little bit capitalist but it is not, because the majority of the people's countries that go to study in another country, comes from countries where the currency's price is lower than dollar American and this has significant importance in our planning and in our budget.
It can exist several kinds of difficulties in our way, but all the students that have the same dream to study in another country know that anyone will give up on this dream because each difficulty that it was got over and each day that passed we are closer to comes true this dream.

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The planning Planning to do Do an exchange Exchange

A good beginning for a college student to go into the international market is through an international student exchange [program] . Nowadays , there are different kinds of exchange [programs] that you can do, exist that are some focus more focusing on developing of your language skills languages or you can you to work , while others are for work and travel but improve , improving your language skills langue in an informal way.
Thus, one thing that is so important for this plan to work is having the money. It can look a little bit capitalist capitalistic, but it is not, because the majority of the countries of people 's countries that go to study in another country abroad , comes from are countries where the currency's price value is lower than dollar the American dollar and this has significant importance in our planning and in our budget budgeting .
 It can exist several Several kinds of difficulties in our way can exist , but all the students that have the same dream to study in another country know that anyone will they shouldn't give up on this dream because each difficulty that it was is ( got over ) [surmounted], and each day that passed we are passes, brings them closer to comes true this their dream.
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JEB3
Good edit. I would change one sentence, not only for brevity, but to avoid the strange redundancy of saying that, "the majority of countries....are countries...". Also it's best to emphasize that people (not countries) travel to other countries. Finally, the word "capitalistic" is inaccurate here. "It can look a little bit exploitative, but it is not, because the majority of people who study abroad are from countries where the currency is valued below the American dollar, significantly impacting planning and budgeting."
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