Write & Correct
English

Sentences used in business writing

I am trying to write up some meeting minutes at work and I am not confident in my grammar for my readers, could you please help correct me?

1)The second shipment of ABC had issues at receiving where the product scanner was generating additional data.

2) Three ABC batches were short on quantity of 5 units.

3)There was an annual cycle count happened in place at both A and B sites on January 1st 2023.

4)Mary presented customer complaints received in the first quarter of 2021 and compared the complaints received from 2022 to the ones from 2021. (Basically Mary was comparing the complaints data from 2022 to 2021, not sure how to word properly in one sentence).

5)Mary added that Johnson Inc contacted her looking for the contract for these products.

6)The overall quantity of complaints received and handled by Johnson Inc was less than Young Inc.

7)Mary presented the difference of the monthly complaints reported between Johnson Inc and Young Inc.

8) Mary mentioned that there is an outstanding request that is pending for 8 months from Young Inc pending Mr.Duke's action ( The request has been there for 8 months for Mr.Duke to take actions, not sure how to word properly).

9) All AAA products are aimed to be fully destroyed by August 2028 and by May 2030 for BBB products. (Not sure how to put them in one sentence)

Posted

Corrections

ADMINISTRATOR
leosmith
Sentences used in business writing Business Writing
I am trying to write up some meeting minutes at work , and I am not confident in my grammar for my readers , could . Could you please help correct me these ? 1) The second shipment of ABC had issues at receiving , where the product scanner was generating additional data. 2) Three ABC batches were short on by a quantity of 5 five units. 3) There was an annual cycle count happened in place taken at both A and B sites on January 1st , 2023. 4) Mary presented customer complaints received in the first quarter of 2021 , and compared the complaints received from in 2022 to the ones from 2021 . ( Basically basically, Mary was comparing the complaints complaint data from 2022 to and 2021 , ; not sure how to word this properly in one sentence). 5) Mary added that Johnson Inc . contacted her , looking for the contract for these products. 6) The overall quantity of complaints received and handled by Johnson Inc . was less than Young Inc. 7) Mary presented the difference of in the monthly complaints reported between Johnson Inc . and Young Inc. 8) Mary mentioned that there is an outstanding request that is has been pending for 8 eight months from Young Inc pending . awaiting Mr. Duke's action ( The the request has been there for 8 eight months , waiting for Mr. Duke to take actions, action; not sure how to word this properly). 9) All AAA products are aimed scheduled to be fully destroyed by August 2028 , and all BBB by May 2030 for BBB products. ( Not not sure how to put them both in one sentence) .
Edited

Comment(s)

Thank you! I have well noted these grammar corrections!
Posted 
Feedback