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Best Bud
Like flash of light in a dark night,
that's how you came into my life.
To many, you've caused a fright,
for squeezing in with all your might.
Seeing that little bud
made me really proud.
Until goes away the gloom,
O flower, take your time to bloom.
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The sparkles then becomes a light if you do not take it as light.The stranger then goes straight , if somebody guide right.
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Nice one Rai! :)
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Thank you, Charlyn! :) This one's for my son.
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Best Bud
Like
a
flash of light in a dark night,
that's how you came into my life.
To many, you've caused a fright,
for squeezing in with all your might.
Seeing that little bud
made me really proud.
Until away goesaway
the gloom,
O flower, take your time to bloom.
that's how you came into my life.
To many, you've caused a fright,
for squeezing in with all your might.
Seeing that little bud
made me really proud.
Until away goes
O flower, take your time to bloom.
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Thanks leosmith. I think that correction down there looks better than the original version.
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I would recommend using "in the dark night" instead of "in a dark night." Reasoning: when referenced it is a particular event or time instead of being a general instance. Everything aforementioned is referencing to a particular time, which is why I would use "the" instead of "a."
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Best Bud
Like
a
flash of light in a dark night,
that's how you came into my life.
To many, you've caused a fright,
for squeezing in with all your might.
Seeing that little bud ,
made me really proud.
Untilgoes
you
go
away
,
the gloom,
O flower, take your time to bloom.
that's how you came into my life.
To many, you've caused a fright,
for squeezing in with all your might.
Seeing that little bud ,
made me really proud.
Until
O flower, take your time to bloom.
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Thanks a bunch, Nicholas. :)
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Best Bud
Like
a
flash of light
in
on
a dark night,
that's how you came into my life.
To
many
For
too long
, you've caused a fright
,
for
.
For
squeezing
in
with
yourself
into
my life.
With all your might.
Seeingthat
this
little bud
,
made me really proud.
Until goes away the gloom .
Oh ,O
flower
,
take your time to bloom.
that's how you came into my life.
With all your might.
Seeing
made me really proud.
Until goes away the gloom .
Oh ,
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Best Bud
Like
a
flash of light in
a
the
dark night,
that's how you came into my life.
To
Too
many, you've caused a fright,
for squeezing in with all your might.
Seeing that little bud
made mereally
so
proud.
Until away goesaway
the gloom,
O flower, take your time to bloom.
that's how you came into my life.
for squeezing in with all your might.
Seeing that little bud
made me
Until away goes
O flower, take your time to bloom.
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Just curious why you used "too many" - did you think she meant there were too many buds? I thought she meant "to many people".
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