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Alafy.Araujo

My first friend

In this post, I'll call my first friend "David". Well, we met at our first school 8 years ago. I was in my place and he came in my direction to ask my name. I answered and then I don't remember anymore.
We keep on studying together in all other years. We played soccer, volleyball, video games, etc. We did a lot of things together and we got a lot of friends. Last year, we were studying Math in a course, but David missed the course so much. I realized the course like an opportunity and I gave up all my free time to study Math.
Eventually, David backed away from our group. We all finished high school. I heard that he has been studying every week for college. We were close friends but were in a different way now. I'm studying English to being able to understand and communicate even more.

Thanks for the corrections.

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Jade.Xuereb
My first friend
In this post, I'll call my first friend "David".
Well, we met at our first school 8 years ago. I was in my place seat and he came in my direction to ask and asked my name. I answered and then I don't remember anymore much else .
We keep on studying together in all other years studied together throughout the rest of school . We played soccer, volleyball, video games, etc. We did a lot of things together and we got made a lot of friends. Last year, we were studying a Math in a course, but David was absent and missed a lot of the course so much . I realized viewed the course like as an opportunity and I gave up all my free time to study Math.
Eventually, David backed drifted away from our group. We all finished high school. I heard that he has been studying every week for college. We were used to be very close friends but were in a things are different way now. I'm studying English to being be able to understand more and communicate even more better .

Thanks for the corrections.
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Alafy.Araujo
Thank you for helping me. I wonder what the difference between "back away" and "drift away". Could you explain it to me, please?
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Jade.Xuereb
you usually back away with a negative feeling like fear... you would back away from an angry barking dog... with friendships, that become distant we use the term drifted apart like a boat
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leosmith
In the usage above, back away is voluntary and drift away is involuntary.
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Jade.Xuereb
Well put Leo, my brain was wondering what the most direct distinguishable difference was
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My first friend
In this post, I'll call talk about my first friend - "David". Well, we We met at our first school 8 years ago. I was in my place class (?) and he came in my direction to ask my name.
I answered and then I don't remember anymore.
 We keep on studying studied together in all other for many years. We played soccer, volleyball, video games, etc. We did a lot of things together and we got a lot of friends. Last year, we were studying studied Math in a course , but David missed the course so much it . I realized the course The course is like an opportunity and so I gave up all my free time to study Math.

Eventually, David backed drifted away from our group. We all finished high school. I heard that he has been studying every week for college. We were close friends but were in a different way now. I'm studying English to being able to understand and communicate even more. We were close friends but we're in different ways now.

Thanks for the corrections.
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